tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post2598633590970806566..comments2024-01-10T01:50:47.469-06:00Comments on Teenage Writer: Part 4 of The Dark KingJakehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07013859345463250479noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post-22767852146906075502010-05-11T12:39:33.276-05:002010-05-11T12:39:33.276-05:00@Gwendolyn
Yep, I have a bit of trouble with tell...@Gwendolyn<br /><br />Yep, I have a bit of trouble with telling... In fact, I always feel a bit disatisfied [wrong spelling, I think, sorry] when I read this part. Ah, the gift (and torture) of self-criticism. :DJakehttp://teenagewritingrocks.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post-38962076746457578772010-05-11T12:34:46.223-05:002010-05-11T12:34:46.223-05:00Lovely! *applauds* Wonderful cliffhanger. And scaa...Lovely! *applauds* Wonderful cliffhanger. And scaary. Those shadowy kidnappers are a bit chilling.<br /><br />Again, I think it could be improved by a tad bit more 'showing' instead of 'telling'.<br /><br />Here's waiting for tomorrow's update!Gwendolynnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post-13618232883007355232010-05-11T12:32:14.247-05:002010-05-11T12:32:14.247-05:00LOL! I gurantee that the best is yet to come... :...LOL! I gurantee that the best is yet to come... :DJakehttp://teenagewritingrocks.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post-71472451505989513332010-05-11T12:27:45.653-05:002010-05-11T12:27:45.653-05:00Each part is getting better and better!! Now I can...Each part is getting better and better!! Now I can't wait for tomorrow to come, even though I have lot of things to do today!!!! AUGH!!RED~Scribehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15150207219814465145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post-85266299163727697172010-05-11T11:05:49.265-05:002010-05-11T11:05:49.265-05:00lol indeed! The worst was Isle of Fire (I think, o...lol indeed! The worst was Isle of Fire (I think, or maybe it was Isle of Swords). The part where the villain was torturing the monk...now that sent shivers upon shivers in my brain. I'm not too keen on uber evil stuff :P But your writing is pretty good :) <br /><br />Squeaks.Mackenzie A. Lockharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04302830070915731520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post-33770299627885042462010-05-11T10:38:25.183-05:002010-05-11T10:38:25.183-05:00Thanks, Squeaks! Some parts of stories give you t...Thanks, Squeaks! Some parts of stories give you the shivers just writing them! I've gotten those a couple of times... :DJakehttp://teenagewritingrocks.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7301712379976680355.post-1688069403941500692010-05-11T10:28:45.190-05:002010-05-11T10:28:45.190-05:00Chills and shivereens!! Too good! What happens nex...Chills and shivereens!! Too good! What happens next??? <br /><br />I'm holding on to the bottom of my chair in hopes that tomorrow will come without any nighttime attacks :S jk, good job though! I like the cliffhanger :) <br /><br />Squeaks.Mackenzie A. Lockharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04302830070915731520noreply@blogger.com