Saturday, October 16, 2010

Tip: Meaning

You can get on without meaning in your stories, right?  Secular books do it all the time, you might reason.

Well, yes an no.  Meaning is possible to leave out in stories.  But then again, without meaning, stories are nothing but that: just stories.  They won't become alive to your readers.  They won't be applicable.  They won't be an amazing epic: it'll just be another book.

Think of all of your favorite books--why do they matter so much?  Lord of the Rings?  Meaning is what made it matter.  The meaning--heroism, sacrifice, love--is part of what made LOTR what it is. 

Meaning can be left out, yes.  But if you want a compelling story, do NOT leave it out. 

I write meaning into my stories for that reason, and because my stories reflect who I am.  I am a Christian--and so my stories likewise reflect my beliefs about morality and meaning. 

Now, if you expect me to tell you how to write meaning into your stories, you're wrong.  I can't tell you how to write morality into your stories.  It wouldn't be meaningful if it came from someone else.  You, and you alone, can write meaning into your stories.  You and God.

Wednesday, October 13, 2010

FORTY THOUSAND WORDS!

Yes, you read right!  The above announcement is CORRECT!!  I have surpassed a word count of FORTY THOUSAND WORDS!!!

*throws confetti*  *sneezes*  Wonderful, rig--ACHOO!  

...right?  

So dance your legs off!  Go listen to Press Play's "New York to LA"!   WOOT!

Now, for all of you who are writing a novel; congratulations.  Writing a novel is awesome.  Here's three things that I find keep me going when I want to quit:

1) I never, NEVER look back at what I wrote until I am finished with my novel.  Who cares about the quality of the words right now?  They don't call it a rough draft for nothing!  Just think--this is a new thing you are writing.  No one has EVER written it before.  EVER.  Just remember that.

2) Go tell some people you're going to write.  In an effort to keep yourself from being embarrassed, you will HAVE to write.  And when you do write, those people encourage.  Part of what kept me going in the last couple of days is the encouragement of the Elves at the Underground forum.  I posted my word count and told them I wouldn't be back until I had written 500 words.  And I did that over and over--and got an amazing and encouraging response.  Things like, "WOO!  Finish it!" [the novel], and "You can do it!" abounded.  

3) Just write.  That's all.

Many thanks to Millard for the encouraging post he made about this landmark of 40,000.  :)  

Okay, readers!  Go out there and write!  

Signed, 

Tuesday, October 12, 2010

Who are the Winners of the FANTASTIC FLAMING GIVEAWAY?

Believe it or not; we have a winner!!  DING DONG!  *cue theme show music*

Actually, if you wish to be precise, we have TWO winners.  There were 20 entries altogether--and 12 entrants--and I have two winners.

Now...*drumroll*  I will tell you the winners...right after I tell you what's at stake.

I am giving away TWO copies of Wayne Thomas Batson's Isle of Fire.  Two BRAND new copies.  Two HARDCOVER copies.  With shiny dust covers...O.o

Isle of Fire is a great book--and hilarious as well.  Anyone remember that one scene where
Cat goes to ask Declan Ross a 'question'?  XD  LOL.

Now, there are two people who will win this amazing, swashbuckling adventure. This shiny, shiny book. This ISLE OF FIRE.


I'm going to tell you who...


...in just a few moments...

...right...

...after this.

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I forgot to say this in my blog post on my other blog, but I want to thank Beorn for putting up this thing on our forum, Alcryion; he put up a sign beneath the header that read (more or less): "Happy Birthday Jake!!!  Sorry, but this print won't go any larger!"  It made my day.  :)

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Anyway, back to the giveaway.  :)

Now, the winners is...


...is....

...is....

...is...

...er, are...

...are...

...are...

...these people.




!!!! ELDRA AND MILLARD !!!!!


Congratulations, Eldra and Millard!  You have WON the Fantastic Flaming Giveaway!!   Throw confetti!  Throw a party!  Throw a baseball!   CONGRATS!

In order for me to get these books to you, you need to email your full addresses to me at jtbdude[at]gmail[dot]com.  If you don't email your addresses to me within the week, I'll have to choose another winner.  :P

Again, congratulations!

Sunday, October 10, 2010

Review; Kestrel's Midnight Song

(NOTE: My giveaway ends tomorrow!  If you haven't yet gotten in on it, be sure and join!  Click here.)


The land of Gable--renowned for its birds, revered for its legends and secrets--is home to the grandest castle in the known world. 


Inside this castle, in a narrow cell atop the dungeon tower, the legendary Marauder known as James Kestrel awaits his hanging. 


Amidst the anticipation and speculation surrounding his execution, rumors are spreading that the Marauders will come out of hiding for the first time in seven years to free Kestrel in order to find the Caelum Flute, an instrument with the power to control the birds, and therefore the world. But only a wandering giant and a slave girl masquerading as an innkeeper know the truth. And everything will fall to the shoulders of a traveling shepherd boy-charged with delivering wool to his king-with no knowledge that his treacherous journey will decide the pending fate of the world. (Description taken from Amazon.com)


If I could sum this book up in a single sentence, I would say, "I can't sum this up in a single sentence."  


In matters of plot, this book is superb.  A Marauder jail-break?  A mad rush for one Caelum Flute?  One of the most unique plots I've read in a long time.  I really liked the plot--a lot. :)  Parker did a great job here.  It twists up and down.  And then it goes sideways.  There was one twist especially that I'll remember for a long time.


The description; as one endorsement said, "Parker is descriptive without being wordy."  I could literally picture the entire scene in my head.  You've got a thumbs up here.


And the Christian themes?  Unmistakable, of course--Parker makes no attempt to disguise the allegory.  The redemption theme with one of the characters was amazing and uplifting, and the themes I detected throughout the book were well done.  


One thing that led me to read this book was this; Parker is a teenaged Christian fantasy author.  Much like what I would like to be--if I could imitate an author within the next couple of years, it would be him.


Cons?


First, there were several font and grammar related things that irritated me.  In my copy (I don't know if it was the same in all of the others) there were several lines near the end that suddenly shifted into a smaller, different font.  There was once place I noticed where 'sheer' was spelled 'shear'.


Second, the character development could've been a  little better.  The minor characters were done well (I especially liked Bart, lol), but I didn't exactly connect with the major characters.  


And last (though this is rather a personal quibble) I really wish it had been longer.  It was rather short--but Parker did this one thing right; he made me wish just for one more chapter.  Just one more paragraph, even.


All in all?  Kestrel's Midnight Song is a great Christian Fantasy book by a teenaged author, lanced with Marauders, mystery, and intrigue.  He's got me pining away for another book.  If he doesn't make one, well...things may take a turn for the worse.  ;)


Rated 9.0 out of 10.  It's well worth your money. :)


Saturday, October 9, 2010

News, Reminders, and Resurrections

My giveaway ends the day after tomorrow!  If you haven't joined, go ahead and click here.

As for other news; Squeaks' Green Giveaway ends at 10:00 tomorrow: 10/10/10.  XD   There's several ties, so be sure to check out the entries--they are all awesome.

And the main point of this?  The illustrious blog, Worthy Fantasy, is BACK, and resurrected!  They posted just yesterday--it's a great blog with a lot of awesome articles about fantasy, so feel free to click on the link above.  Oh, and I forgot to mention--I am now among their number, along with a couple other awesome bloggers.

Besides all of this news, I posted a poem on my other blog that got an great response--because of its randomness.  Be prepared for rhyming randomness--I'm serious.  Here's the first couple of lines.



The Flow'st Upon a Midnight


I said to him, and he to me,
That I had gone and ate a tree,
The flow'st upon a midnight three,
And caused the cat to flee.


If you want to read some more of it, you can go here.  Tell me what you think! :)


Thursday, October 7, 2010

The WINNER...of the Word War...is...

Building suspense...I know that you won't bother checking to see who wrote the most words in this past word war.  :)   So I get to torture you.

Who wrote a lot of words?  Who gets the Word War Winner logo? Who gets and EXTRA entry into my giveaway?  Are you ready for the shock?  The amazingness?!  The SUSPENSE!?!?

The winner is...

....

...

...

!Miss Pickwickian!

CONGRATULATIONS!  :)  You wrote over three thousand words!!  :D  Feel free to copy the WWII Winner logo and post it on your sidebar on your blog.  :)

(Please see that this award is NOT the same as the last one I gave away--see the 'Word War II'?)

Great job!  I'll see you guys next time.  :)  Don't worry--Word War III is going to come...sooner or later.

Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Updates? News? Giveaways? All of the Above

First things first: I have just passed 10 participants in my giveaway, which means I will be giving away TWO copies of Isle of Fire!  :)   Congrats.  Only five days left until the giveaway ends!  If you want to get in on the giveaway, you can go here and comment to tell me you want to join.

Now, I have several tidbits of news and some other stuff as well.

Right now, I'm reading J. R. Parker's Kestrel's Midnight Song.  You can expect a review coming up soon.

And then there's news of several giveaways.

Squeaks, at Hidden Doorways, is having the voting for the Green Giveaway.  It's a writing/giveaway (technically, it's a contest) thing where writers submit a descriptive piece of their work.  I submitted a piece, so be sure to check it out!  It needs votes, and lots of 'em.  The pieces submitted are spectacular.

Star-Dreamer (a.k.a. Nichole White) over at the Pen and the Parchment is having a giveaway...with THREE different books.  :)  It's a First Chapter contest, where writers get brave and submit their first chapter (and possibly the prologue as well).  It needs a lot of entries as well.  I'll be sending in my own first chapter soon.  Be brave!  Send in your chapter. :)

On other news, my novel, Sadaar, is moving again...slowly.  But I'm working on it. :)  I'm aiming for possibly 50,000 words on it, but I have no idea where it might end up.

And lastly...November is coming.  And with it, NaNoWriMo.  I'll be sharing an outline/idea that I have for it soon, probably after the giveaway has finished.

Tuesday, October 5, 2010

WORD WAR II

Load your pens!  Make sure you have a good supply of ink!  Prepare your paper!  The word war begins...NOW!  It's six o'clock P.M. here--whatever time it is there, the word war starts at six o'clock P.M.


Here's the rules in a nutshell; 


Write anytime from 6:00 P.M. your time to 10:00 your time--and only between then.  Use the post that I'm going to post tomorrow to keep us updated on your progress.

To win, you must write the MOST WORDS IN THE ALLOTED TIME than any other competent, not including me.  Once it is past 10:00, post your before-and-after word count--and the total words you wrote in the alotted time--in a comment.  I will wait one day for all of the competents to comment (your word count is void if you don't comment!), and then announce the winner.  

The winner of the word war wins two things; An extra entry in the giveaway--one for competing, and one for winning--and a banner that you can copy off of my blog and put on your sidebar.  


It's time...WRITE LIKE YOU'VE NEVER WRITTEN BEFORE!

Word War II begins NOW!!!

~~If you have any questions, feel free to comment!~~

Monday, October 4, 2010

The End is Near...

One week.  That's all that's left...one week.  This giveaway is going to end...in one week.

Want to get in on it?  Click here.

As of right now, we have six entrants.  Remember, I am giving away TWO copies of Isle of Fire--providing I have at least ten participants.  Those of you who are in the giveaway, tell people about it!  If you can get a person to join--and the participant count passes 10--then your odds of winning will double.  Of course, then, you don't want people to know about this giveaway. XD

Oh, and the new banner is rather nifty, eh?  :)   Feel free to copy it and spread it around, as well as with the old one.


CONTESTERS, LOOK HERE!

The Word War is TOMORROW!   Here's what's goin' on. 

The basic rules?  Write anytime from 6:00 your time to 10:00 your time--and only between then.  Use the post that I'm going to post tomorrow to keep us updated on your progress.

How do you win?  Easier said than done--you must write the MOST WORDS IN THE ALLOTED TIME than any other competent.  :)  (I'll be participating, but my own words won't count) Once it is past 10:00, post your before-and-after word count--and the total words you wrote in the alotted time--in a comment.  I will wait one day for all of the competents to comment (if you don't comment and tell your word count during that time, your word count is void!), and then announce the winner. 

The winner of the word war wins two things!  An extra entry in the giveaway--one for competing, and one for winning--and a coolio little banner that you can copy off of my blog and put on your sidebar.  :)

Get ready...for the end is near.  >_>

Wednesday, September 29, 2010

The Fantastic Flaming Giveaway

It's here--the giveaway.  To be specific, the FANTASTIC FLAMING GIVEAWAY.  Note the flaming...thing to the left.  :)   I made it myself. 

Take a good look at it!  Be amazed!  :)

This is in celebration of three things; first, I have reached 40 followers!  Second, I have surpassed 100 posts, and last, this is celebrating anyone and everyone that is writing a novel.  If you've written anything at all in your novel, congradulations!

To get into this giveaway, you have to follow my blog.  This doesn't get you 'entries' like last time, but it is required if you want to get in on this giveaway.

Now, here are the guidelines for getting entries.

1) If you are writing a novel, you get an automatic entry.  Yep, you heard me right.  :)  Post your word count in a comment--or your chapter/scene count, if you don't want to share your word count--and that will get you an entry.  You have to post it in a comment, or else I won't know you wish to participate in the giveaway.

2) If you post about this giveaway on your blog (or some social networking site) you will get an entry.  Post the URL in a comment so I can verify it.  :)  It would be preferable if you copied and used the 'The Fantastic Flaming Giveaway' picture in your post.

3) If you participate in the next Word War (yes, there's going to be a Word War II), you get an entry.  If you win the word war, you get an extra entry!  :) 

And as for the prize....

A brand new copy of Wayne Thomas Batson's book Isle of Fire.   Perhaps not the newest book that's out, but, hey; it's a free book.  :) 

And if I get more than 10 participants in the Fantastic Flaming Giveaway...Well, there will be two winners.  Two people wil win a copy of Isle of Fire if I get more than 10 participants.  :)  

Coming up is a Word War, and a chance to win extra entries into this giveaway. 

If you don't wish to--or just plain can't--post things in comments, like word count for your novel, you can email it to me (jtbdude[at]gmail[dot]com).

Oh, and one more thing; I just started the writing section of One Year Adventure Novel, so I'll be posting the word count of that on the top of the blog as well as my Sadaar word count.

Get ready....this giveaway ends October 11, my birthday.  Moahaha. :)

PS; No close family may participate.  Yes, that means YOU, Vrenith.

Sunday, September 26, 2010

40+100=G

In case you are wondering, I have not gone off the deep end--or the 'algebra' end, as I might say.  I did that a long time ago.  But for those of you who are math-savvy, you understand the above equation.  40 followers plus 100 posts equuals...G.   G is usually for Gandalf, but this time around it stands for something else--giveaway.  Wait patiently!  It will come soon enough. :)

In other matters, I've decided to have another reflective post.  The following timeline is of my blog!  Have fun.

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THE AGE OF SILENCE
~March, 2010

This is the Age of Silence--I had no blog followers, and two comments in all of my 20 or so posts--one from Andrew Peterson (there's a story behind that one, and how I recieved it!), and one from J. R. Parker, who is now the author of Kestrel's Midnight Song.  :)  He became my first follower.

THE AGE OF THREADS
~April, 2010

I began to pick up followers around this time, Squeaks being one of the first and still an active follower today. :)

On March 31 or 30, I believe, I tried my hand in a 'Kill This Thread' contest for a copy of Venom and Song on Wayne Thomas Batson's blog.  Believe it or not, it is still going on today!  XD  This is how many people began following me, as well as my comments on other blogs.


THE AGE OF THE DARK KING
~May, 2010

Some of you older followers may remember my segmented story 'The Dark King'.   I posted the Dark King through May, and I was delighted at the response. :)  I'm still editing it off and on today (lol).  My blog picked up steam then, as well. :)

THE AGE OF COMMENTS
~June-September, 2010

Throughout all of this period of time, I gained many followers, had my first giveaway, and--the most remarkable in my sight--I have had at least one comment on every single post since the fifth of July.  Wow! 

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The giveaway I am going to have--soon--is not only because of followers and posts--though those were a convient addend--but also because of all of you readers.  Thanks for reading Teenage Writer, everyone! :D

Friday, September 24, 2010

Tip; Prologues...

As you can see, my word count has been BUMPED!  I am now over 33,000 words on Sadaar.

But today I thought I'd talk of prologues.

Prologues are commonly the things that get writers going.  When they write, they write a prologue--and things go on from there, usually.

For some strange reason, I do things differently than most.  Prologue?  I didn't have my prologue (on my first novel) until some time after it was finished.  And even then I tinkered with it off and on, and added another POV and some suspense to keep things interesting.

The reason I'm writing about this is because I started on my prologue--for Sadaar.

Now, for me, I put prologues in my novels for two reasons.

1) Foreshadowing

Ah, yes, we come to it again.  Foreshadowing is an excellent technique (one that I ought to write a post on sometime) that comes in handy when one is trying to bring some suspense and shock into the story.  I won't go into the denfinition of foreshadowing, but I use my prologue to foreshadow events that are to come.

2) Beginning

The plain truth is this; if you start an adventure novel with something that isn't an adventure, well, no one will want to read it.  With this in mind, I start my novels with these 'prologues' in order to kick the reader into the story and hold them there.

Besides this, there is one other way to use a prologue.

3) To Give Something...

At times, prologues give something.  They can give you events that happened in the past (like from L. B. Graham's Binding of the Blade series--each book started with a past event) or events that happened in the present.  And sometimes, they give a hint at what is to come, partly through foreshadowing.  If you give a reader a nugget of certain information, it can hint at what is to come, or what will happen.  If someone betrays your Protagonist, the prologue can be a scene(s) in which the traitor talks to the person who convinced him/her to betray the Protagonist--but the reader doesn't know who the traitor is, yet.  More on that in my post on Betrayal.

There you have it!  Assuming you're writing some sort of an adventure novel (if you're writing a novel, that is), one of the best ways to grab a reader's attention, foreshadow, and give a nugget of precious information is to have a prologue.  Successful prologues should have at least the first element--grabbing the reader's attention.  But that discussion is for another post.

Thursday, September 23, 2010

Review; The Skin Map

It is the ultimate quest for the ultimate treasure.  Chasing a map tattooed on human skin, across an omniverse of intersecting realities, to unravel the future of the future.

Kit Livingstone's great-grandfather appears to him in a deserted alley during a tumultuous storm.  He reveals an unbelieveable story: that ley lines throughout Britain are not merely the stuff of legend or the weekend hobby of deluded cranks, but pathways to other worlds.  To those who know how to use them, they grant the ability to travel the multi-layered universe of which we ordinarily habit only a tiny part. 

One explorer know more than most.  Braving every danger, he toured both time and space on voyages of heroic discovery.  Ever on his guard, and fearful of becoming lost in the cosmos, he developed an intricate code--a roadmap of symbols--that he tattooed onto his own body.  This Skin Map has since been lost in time.  Now the race is on to recover all of the pieces and discover its secrets.

But the Skin Map itself is not the ultimate goal.  It is merely the beginning of a vast and marvelous quest for a prize beyond imagining.  (From the back cover)

Before I start talking about the actual book, let me tell you one thing; this isn't all it's cracked up to be.  By the description, I expected a dangerous quest to recover all of the pieces of this 'Skin Map'.  Unfortunately, it didn't turn out that way.  Not to say I didn't like this book--I did--but I just wanted to warn you that the description is misleading.

Now, as for the actual book; the plot and characters were superb.  Especially the plot.  It was a unique book, to be sure.  I had never heard of these 'ley lines' before (in a real-world context, that is; I believe there were ley lines in Hero, Second Class), and the whole idea of a skin map, Omniverse, etc. was highly imaginitive.  The characters were relatable--although I didn't exactly feel a pang of sadness when one of the characters died.  That part could've been done better. 

And the writing?  As Lawhead has proved over and over, his writing is great and refreshing. 

And now for the cons.  It's not what Lawhead did--it's what he DIDN'T do.

First, I felt that the Skin Map could have been a longer book.  Sure, it fell just short of 400 pages, but the plot moved slowly and didn't go very far before the book ended.  In fact, I felt like I had gotten only into the introduction to these worlds Lawhead had created.  Now I know about ley lines, Omniverse, the Skin Map and its history, etc., but this book was more about a primitive coffee shop than an epic quest for a Skin Map.  No offense to Lawhead.  :)

Second, there was a surprising lack of, well, Christ in this book.  I saw several threads of religious thought that could be expanded in the next book, but there wasn't any of the amazing allegory that I found in 'In the Hall of the Dragon King' and the other books in that series.  I was disappointed by this. 

Third, (though this is rather related to my second point) I felt that I didn't really get any meaning out of this book.  Whereas books like Dragons in Our Midst have values, morals, and themes (not to mention Biblical truths), this book had a lack of them.  I just didn't find anything meaningful to take away with me.  Perhaps this will change with the next book--perhaps not.  But until then, this series isn't much more than an interesting adventure.

All in all?  If you don't mind slow plot--and coffeehouses--then you'd like this book.  It has a great plot and cast of characters.  But don't expect to bring much meaning back with you.

Rated 8.5 out of 10.

Wednesday, September 22, 2010

A Rather Interesting Use of Foreshadowing...

40 is an interesting number. Nice, round, and above all, it is fun to watch the faces of your parents when you say, "For...ty..." But what am I talking about? You'll see.

First, Squeaks is having a contest...er, giveaway...thing. :) It's called the Green Giveaway--and it would be nice if you'd head on over to Hidden Doorways and give him a Hello. Oh, and while you're there, you can vote for my storythingamabobber. :)

Second, Nichole White (a.k.a. Star Dreamer) is having a giveaway sort of thing too. I haven't been able to do it yet, but go on over there anyway. :)

Third! Recently I've been engrossed in Wayne Thomas Batson's Tribe Contest for Venom and Song, he and Christopher Hopper's newest book in the Berinfell Prophecies. It's really complicated, so you can just click here to find out all about it. :)

And last, but not least, 100! Centenial!...I think that's the word.

Now, I'm going to tie this all together--because all of my words before this was a rather interesting use of foreshadowing.

The very first paragraph? It means that I am drawing close to !40! followers. Wow! And do you know what the second and third paragraphs mean? Nope, you don't. But I'll give you a hint--I'll be doing something...let's say, similar. The third paragraph is about the Tribe Contest, yes? Wait. You'll find out later what that means. Fourth? I am about to break 100 posts. Very soon. :)

To tie this altogether...something mysterious is going to happen soon. VERY soon. And it is tied to giveaways, the Tribe Contest (though very loosely), 100 posts and 40 followers.

Once I get over 100 posts and 40 followers...well, something...hm...interesting will happen. Shadow and Flame... No, not another LOTR giveaway or anything to do with LOTR! I just like that combination of words--and it has to do with all of this.

One more thing! Rabbits are holding their Thousand-Year-Meeting! So, to quote Beorn in a comment on my other blog, be prepared for all rabbits to 'go ninja'. If you want to find out more (and save your life), go here.

Saturday, September 18, 2010

Tip; Betrayal

Betrayal. A trusted person gone bad--so bad that s/he is willing to betray her/his closest friends.

It's something many books should have--and there's a certain way to do it. Hopefully, in this post, I can show you a few of those ways.


1) Foreshadow

Foreshadowing is a useful thing--especially when betrayal is involved. If your story has more than one POV, this can be a useful thing--and foreshadowing can happen without multiple POVs as well. Here is two of the main points of foreshadowing.

1. Protagonist foreshadowing. This is done when you hint at something suspicious, using your Protagonist. In The Door Within, Aiden sees his 'betrayer' sneak out of bed into the night. He assumes the Glimpse had gone to relieve himself--but later, you find out that he had
betrayed them. This kind of foreshadowing makes you say, "Why didn't I see this coming?" Its main point is creating shock--a good thing for an epic story.

2. Multiple POV foreshadowing. This is where you go into an 'enemy' POV and basically tell the reader that someone is going to betray the Protagonist. I'm sure you can think of a couple stories that have this example--but I can't think of any as of right now. M-POV foreshadowing's main purpose is 'dread' and suspense. Dread is a sense of impending danger, and, of course, you know what suspense is.


2) I Didn't See This Coming

Like Protagonist POV foreshadowing, this is the 'I didn't see this coming' part of betrayal. There are basically three kinds of IDSTC;

1. Foreshadowing, like discussed in the first point of the foreshadowing part of this post.

2. Making you think someone else will betray them. I have read this in many books--and that has a reason; it is a good way to shock someone. Say you have the Protagonist and two companions. The Protagonist is warned, one way or another, that one of his/her companions is going to betray him/her. The Protagonist immediately suspects one person...but after the betrayal takes place, s/he finds out it was the other companion that was the traitor. Misleading your reader into thinking someone is a traitor--who actually isn't the traitor--is a great way to make a betrayal all the more shocking.

3. Making a very close friend betray the Protagonist. This works wonderfully because it is unexpected. In fact (I really should have said this earlier), the greatest tool for betrayal is to make it unexpected. But since close friends--and even family--are usually held as 'good' guys, it makes it shocking. Judas was an extremely close friend--one of the Twelve--to Jesus, yet he betrayed Him.


Which is the best way to do this? Well, I've said this many times before on various subjects, but I'm going to say it again; do both.

Make the person a close friend--and mislead the reader as to the betrayer at the same time. Make the Protagonist foreshadow the betrayal--and (if you can) make an enemy tell of the betrayal upcoming. Do this, and your betrayal will be even more shocking and terrible--the goal of a good betrayal.

Friday, September 17, 2010

Purple Prose

This post is inspired by Squeaks' Purple Prose post at Hidden Doorways, just so you know. Squeaks wrote an intriguing post on it and inspired me to do the same. :)

So, what is purple prose? From what I hear, the definition goes something like this;

"1) Prose that is overly descriptive or flowery, and useless or, 2) Prose that describes things uniquely."

But is it good to use? Does it matter to the reader?

Sometimes purple prose is useless to those who don't enjoy description at all. Most people view it as useless to the plot. Why take the time to describe all of this useless stuff?

On the other hand, some people are enchanted by 'purple prose'.

Here's the 'Purple Prose is Useless' argument.

1. Purple prose is agonizing to get through.
2. It is useless to the plot.
3. It is unneeded.

And the Purple Prose-er's reply?

1. REAL purple prose, written right, flies right by.
2. Useless? Just put it in the right places and enhance the plot.
3. Unneeded? Quite the contrary. If you have the right amounts in the right places, it gives imagery to the story.


But what is an example of purple prose? Squeaks gives this, from Paul Clifford, a novel written by Edward Bulwer-Lytton (though I have never read it myself), as an example.

"It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents—except at occasional intervals, when it was checked by a violent gust of wind which swept up the streets (for it is in London that our scene lies), rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness."


Who does not find this beautiful?? What did the author do right to immerse you in his Purple Prose?

1) He used Personification. Description (especially purple prose) is not all adjectives, adverbs, etc. Personification does a better job. "...by a violent gust of wind which swept up the streets...rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness." [Emphasis added] Do you see the personification? Personificationi is where you put human characteristics to inanimate things.

2) He mixed in information. From this one sentence, you gain that 1. the lamps are flickering, 2. There is a violent storm going on, and 3. this takes place in London.

3) He added depth to the description. Not only is this a storm, this is a violent and gusty storm.

4) He showed. He told you that it it was a violent and gusty storm--and then showed it. The prose said, "...a violent gust of wind.." This is where many writers would stop in terms of description. But the author shows just how violent the wind is. "...which swept up the streets...rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness."


So, is purple prose good? Is it bad? You decide. But purple prose is only good when done skilfully.

Monday, September 13, 2010

Tip; Kicking out the Adverbs

Adverbs are usually not good for your novel. Nope. Nada.

You should usually get rid of them. Before you cling to your 'wearilies' and 'strangelies' and yell, "NO! Never! I love my adverbs!" or think "About time someone told me how to do this!" or just an indifferent read-through of this post--let me show you a few things that I have learned.

1) Beef up your verbs. (Yes, I just HAD to use that word) ;)

Consider the following sentence, that uses an adverb. "He walked hurriedly along the sidewalk." It's what I'd call 'an okay' sentence. But it could be better--and it 'tells'. How do you defeat the adverb, though, keeping the meaning of the sentence, describing the same idea, and 'showing'? You 'beef up' the verb. "He hurried along the sidewalk." Easy! And which one sounds better?

Here's a few more examples.

With adverb; "The man looked carefully around the room."
Without adverb; "The man peered around the room."

With adverb; "Sam walked carefully because of the acorns on the ground."
Without adverb; "Sam crept through the yard, mindful of the acorns littering the ground." (By the way, this could use some clarification, but I won't go through the editing process.)

2) Replace the Adverb

Replace the adverb with an adjective or some other word.

With adverb; "The man peered around the room cautiously."
Without adverb; "The man peered around the room, careful to stay hidden from all eyes."

Note that I didn't say 'careful to not be seen' there--I originally did (when I wrote this section of the post), but I realized that I had unknowingly stuck a 'not' adverb in there. :P So I rewrote it, and it looks better.


But sometimes you CAN use them. Yep, don't throw them all away yet. Consider the following sentence from my novel;

"Aron chose his words carefully."

There's an adverb in there! But look what happens when I try to replace it (since I can't really do anything else to the verb).

"Aron chose his words, careful to..." To what? Ah, but that would be telling. But say I do 'tell'; what does it look like then? "Aron chose his words, careful to keep all his information hidden."

It's a rather unwieldy sentence, and I think you will agree that the original sentence is better.

And there are other examples as well; "'I don't know,' he said wearily." It would probably be best to leave that sentence as it is. Say we change it, and look what we come up with. "'I don't know,' he said, weary from...' We'd have to go into an explanation of why he is weary which is telling. Not a good idea. :)

Sunday, September 12, 2010

Review; The Lightning Thief

There are three reasons why I have read and reviewed this book--one, I am curious to know what the fuss is about it--two, I wanted to blog about it and tell you guys and gals what I thought, and third, because I saw the movie and was interested. :)

"After getting expelled from yet another school for yet another clash with mythological monsters only he can see, twelve-year-old Percy Jackson is taken to Camp Half-Blood, where he finally learns the truth about his unique abilities: He is a demigod, half human, half immortal. Even more stunning: His father is the Greek god Poseidon, ruler of the sea, making Percy one of the most powerful demigods alive. There's little time to process this news. All too soon, a cryptic prophecy from the Oracle sends Percy on his first quest, a mission to the Underworld to prevent a war among the gods of Olympus." (Taken from Amazon.com)

This book has been quite a sensation, I know, in children's fantasy. A major movie was made about it, and what is even more remarkable (to me) is that a close friend of mine actually read all of these books. You don't know my friend, but if you did, you would know that he usually doesn't read much--and fantasy books of this size are almost unheard of.

When I read this book, I didn't know what to expect. I liked the movie well enough, but what drew in the readers so much?

The concept, at least, is interesting. Greek gods in New York? And I thought it was interesting and mildly funny that the entrance to Hades was in Hollywood. ;)

The plot? Well, it was all right. I liked it well enough to read it and order the next books from the library--but I must say that the movie rather ruined it for me. I already knew what was going to happen, so maybe that is what took away my enjoyment of the plot.

The characters, Percy at least, were developed well enough for a book like this.

But theologically, what do I think of this book? Well, if you can get past the whole idea of Greek gods being real and coming down and having demigod sons and daughters (which I wasn't really impressed with, though it was mythology) in modern day, then you could read this book. However, the author didn't say there was no 'God' in this book, meaning, all there is, is just Greek 'gods'. For instance, consider these sentences from the book;

"'Wait,' I told Chiron. 'You're telling me there's such a thing as God.'

"'Well, now," Chiron said. "God--capital G, God. That's a different matter altogether. We shan't deal with the metaphysical.'

"'Metaphysical? But you were just talking about--'

"Ah, gods, plural, as in, great beings that control the forces of nature and human endeavors: the immortal gods of Olympus. That's a smaller matter.'"

So you can decide for yourself about the theology of this book.

But otherwise, (meaning, besides the fact that Poseidon's son is Percy, yet he, Poseidon, was not married, Greek mythology, etc.), there is only one other thing I don't agree with; Percy's mother turns her husband to stone with Medusa's head. :P

But should you read this book or not? It depends on the person. You may or may not want to read about Greek gods and one of their mortal offspring--that is your choice. But keep in mind this; when I placed a hold on the Lightning Thief at the library, I was number 120 in line. There were 119 people in front of me, waiting for the book. Even now, I am number 49 for the second book. It may or may not be worthwhile to wait for the book--most likely, for many of you with better books to read, the latter.

One more point before I let you go; what frustrates me is that this book is so popular. Not that I resent it's popularity, but I have read many better books than this, with much better characters, plot, etc. (Christian fantasy books!) and they are being left on the shelves by many people. If you have a choice between this and a Wayne Thomas Batson book, for example, there is no choice. WTB would win hands down. Even now I would much have rather spent my time reading All My Holy Mountain (by L. B. Graham) than this book--unfortunately, it isn't in yet. What I mean to say is this; why should these books be selling so well and are being so popular when the overall writing, plot, and character doesn't compare to the average Christian fantasy novel? But I know the answer already--we live in a secular society. :P

But overall? My rating is probably somewhere around 7 out of 10--depending on the person.

Friday, September 10, 2010

Tip; Going Someplace?

Sometimes the story wants to go someplace that you don't want it to go--or goes somewhere you didn't foresee. For example, consider the following sentences I recently wrote in my novel not an hour ago--yes, it is finally moving again.


A familiar cry sounded nearby. "Maston! Are ye deaf? Tell the men to unload, and do it sharpish!"

An incredulous thought crossed Aron's mind. Captain Jaskin?

The barrel-chested man stormed into view, a man in tow. "Sir," the man was saying, "I could not find a solitary man willing to--"

"Tis yer job!" the captain growled. "Do it right, or ye'll find yerself out of work. Permanently!"

The captain abruptly changed course and crashed into Aron. "Sir!" Aron said quickly, surprised.

Captain Jaskin raised a bushy eyebrow. "Aye? Why, if tisn't the Paladain lad 'imself! Are ye looking for work again?" His normally frowning face took on a slightly more pleasant hue. "What brings ye to this..." He glanced around. "This...place?"

Aron bowed slightly. "It is good to see you again, Captain. I...well, it's a long story, sir."
The large man clapped Aron on the back. "Then ye can tell it to me in my quarters. Come!" He said it with such force that Aron didn't dare disobey...



The thought of Aron, my character, going to Captain Jaskin's quarters didn't cross my mind until it popped up. Sometimes characters are just so forceful that they force the story to go somewhere else. You see, I needed Jaskin to take Aron somewhere on his ship--but Aron had to ask at one time or another. Instead of asking then and there, the natural thing to do would be to go somewhere comfortable to talk--his quarters. If you can manage to make your character do the 'natural' thing--that is one step closer to a better character.

Tolkien, in a letter to someone (I haven't the slightest idea who--I'll find out in a moment), once wrote this;

"I met a lot of things on the way that astonished me. Tom Bombadil I knew already; but I had never been to Bree. Strider sitting in the corner at the inn was a shock, and I had no more idea who he was than had Frodo. The Mines of Moria had been a mere name; and of Lothlórien no word had reached my mortal ears till I came there. Far away I knew there were Horse-lords on the confines of an ancient Kingdom of Men, but the Fangorn Forest was an unforeseen adventure. I had never heard of the House of Eorl nor of the Stewards of Gondor. Most disquieting of all, Saruman had never been revealed to me, and I was as mystified as Frodo at Gandalf's failure to appear on September 22."

-J. R. R. Tolkien, in a letter to W. H. Auden, 7 June 1955

In a fantasy novel, there are many more 'unknowns' than there are 'knowns'. If one pops up along the way, don't bother trying to revise it. Stuff that comes out naturally is usually good for your novel. It shouldn't effect the overall plot too much. If something pops up that you had not foreseen, then evaluate it. If it is good, keep it! If not, don't be afraid to cut it.

A GIVEAWAY!

Did I make your heart jump when you saw the title?

Unfortunately (as I do not have the financial means), it is not my giveaway. It is actually Noah's, over at his blog Books I Recommend. PLEASE do not click that link, though! I rather want that book...a lot. I have been wanting to read the book he is giving away--A Star Curiously Singing, by Kerry Nietz--for some time, and my chances go down ever time someone clicks that link. XD

I'm just kidding. Go ahead and click on the link if you must. :)